[Bleach smut drabble] #3, challenge 1 - tiara - Ichigo/Orihime

[beck]

Well I made my minimum requirement for bleach_quickies.

EDIT: I said I would come back and edit this entry once I figured out a better way to fix what I had posted before. Special thanx go out to wardove for helping me out on getting it to sound TONS better.

Hope you guys enjoy this version.


Character: Ichigo
Pairing: Ichigo/Orihime
Prompt: tiara
Words: 189



At first, Ichigo had felt somewhat emasculated, having let Orihime talk him into, well, more like seduce him, into role playing such a girlish fantasy. Though now, feeling her tongue stroking along his own as she nestled herself fully onto him, he knew giving into her idea had been a really, and he meant, a really, good move. He breathed in deep when her mouth left his to trail kisses along his neck, causing her nipples to brush against his as she rolled her hips. Thrusting against her, his head lolled to the side, and half lidded dark eyes caught the reflection of their slick nude bodies in the mirror across the room.

A bubble crown encircled his head, matching perfectly with the bubble tiara that graced her strawberry-blond locks; after all, her reasoning was that a princess could not have a tiara without her prince having his crown. Odd perhaps, silly maybe, but right now, for all he cared, he would have had worn a bubble beard if it meant having a naked and wet Orihime fucking his brains out like she was doing at this very moment.

Comments

[avi-via-vai.livejournal.com]

Aw that's cute... and I always want to illustrate bath scenes (What? Me draw smut other then RenRuki? No way! >>;) and this one seem perticularly fun.

But I'm at work. Dammit. X_x

[era-chan.livejournal.com]

Not bad. Not as good as the first two, but that is just my taste. Anyway, care to hear a suggestion/critic? I think that Ichigo should be more INVOLVED into the ACT. He sounded and feels [to me] like he is not 'into' it as Orihime since he has the time to "willed himself not to snort in amusement". If he has time to think about it in that much context (okay, in those first two sentences) then the feeling of the naughtiness is dimmed. My suggestion would be for Ichigo to think about the bubble tiara/crown and how that ended in a 'delightful' interlude of *cough* fucking. That said, the idea of the tiara and the bath scene is great together, and when the challenge of Renji and/or Rukia comes up, I'll be one of the eager ones who'll want to read them. Great job on your contributions , Beck!

[yankeerose69.livejournal.com]

THANK YOU for the suggestion/critic. I just didn't know where to go with it. I mean there was something there but by the time I started typing, it was gone. I'm re-working it by your suggestions and seeing how it'll go. I was torn between paperclip and tiara but wasn't sure which one could produce more. Besides, for tiara, I know I can do better since it was only 126 words and I had 74 to play with.

[scarbie.livejournal.com]

Hehehehe, that's just like Orihime wanting Ichigo to have a bubble crown to go with her tiara.